Talk:Day 181-190/@comment-173.24.192.74-20150531003150

Day 190:

Thanks again, Champsy!

"Today is the day of opening of the shop." (Simple fix: "...the opening...." Could also be reworded: "The shop opens today.")

"During a split second,..." -> "For a split second,..." (standard English phrasing)

"...like parent and child...." (LOL. They are parent and child. Maybe "...like a normal parent and child...." I think that fits what the author intended, assuming I'm correctly interpreting the author's intent through the TL. Otherwise, not sure how to reword this to make it sound not silly. Sorry.)

Noun/pronoun consistancy: "The dungeon monsters from the 【Age of the Gods Dungeon】 were very delicious. It almost melted on my tongue when I ate it raw, but it’s even more delicious when I cook it." ("Monsters" is plural,  so "it" needs to be "they" etc.) -> "They almost melted on my tongue when I ate them raw, but they're even more delicious when I cook them."