Thread:Caudyr/@comment-29246616-20160723145009/@comment-4784862-20160724043011

Considering your grammatical errors in this post, I'm kind of leery about other errors you'd make while editing. However, I also realize that some people's work differs greatly from posts they make.

Anyway, I checked the history of what you edited, and tbh...there were several things that you edited that were either unnecessary, or it just changed the meaning around.

One thing to keep in mind is that this series uses a combination of both present and past tenses, and sometimes in the SAME SENTENCE. This is intentional, as it's the way the author did it, and it denotes that he's "presently writing about past events" basically.

While looking at some of your changes, I realized that some of the sentences could be rearranged to flow better and portray their meaning better. That's the benefit of time passing since I last looked at it.

Anyway, here's the link that shows the changes between the original and your edits...and I'll be going through in this window and mentioning the ones that were unnecessary or incorrect.

I'll number them in the order of the lines where the red text on that link occurs (lines with multiple red text count as one line), which is what shows where something has been ADDED OR CHANGED in it by you.


 * 1) 1 - There was no need to get rid of the comma and changing it to "which numbered thirty"...as it was still grammatically correct with the ", numbering thirty" there instead.
 * 2) 2 - The "as we wondered" wasn't really necessary, as it was made past tense by the "we were wondering". The "were" made it past tense. That said, it could still be reworded to "feel" better, so I did that.
 * 3) 3 - This is a case where what you changed is something that shouldn't have been changed. He's talking in the present tense about something that happened PREVIOUSLY. He "wasn't" certain...but "is presently certain". Anyway, I changed the organization of the sentence to reflect that, so it's easier to understand it.
 * 4) 4 - This sentence was grammatically correct to begin with, and you made it grammatically incorrect. The present tense at the start is correct, because again...he's talking in present tense about how he WAS ready for death at the time. The "made me realize" part is ALREADY past tense, and changing it to "made me realized" just screws up the grammar altogether. Also, the "indeed important" isn't necessary, as the ", after all." at the end properly takes care of that...there just wasn't really a need to change it.
 * 5) 5 - None of these changes were necessary, as the tense was already correct. Again, you have to realize that Rou is talking in present tense about things that HAPPENED DURING THE DAY. Therefore, there's a mix of present and past tense in a lot of the sentences. I know it might seem a bit weird, but that's just how it is. Changing "looks" to "looked" made it grammatically incorrect, as well. I did add another word to make it flow better as well, though.
 * 6) 6 - This is definitely an improvement overall, but I did make a slight change to it anyway (that was from my original post anyway, heh).
 * 7) 7 -  I restored the ", after all." because he's reaffirming the fact that upgrading their gear is important. Not SIMPLY stating it.
 * 8) 8 - This is better overall, but I did make a slight change to further improve the flow of words (which was not something you did and I'm fixing, heh). It i nvolved removing a period that the author had put in, which isn't grammatically necessary in english. ^^
 * 9) 9 - I think this is partially my fault, as I could've worded this better originally. I'm putting another version of it up, which is hopefully better than the original. That said, the "as I ate it" is still necessary, imo. ^^
 * 10) 10 - No need to change the "As a result" at the beginning imo, though I did leave the second change.
 * 11) 11 - The changes you made actually screwed up the sentence's structure altogether. Also, I'm pretty sure the tense was properly done for this sentence to begin with...as he's CURRENTLY talking about the fact that he FIGURES he can avoid hunting them from now on, since the growth rate from eating them WAS bad. Fixing this. The growth rate was bad DUE to the bats being weak...and AS SUCH...he figures that he can avoid them (it's what he's thinking at that time, not earlier in the day).
 * 12) 12 - Left the first change as it is, but reverted the second change. The second change you made just doesn't really work with the way the sentences are structured.
 * 1) 7 -  I restored the ", after all." because he's reaffirming the fact that upgrading their gear is important. Not SIMPLY stating it.
 * 2) 8 - This is better overall, but I did make a slight change to further improve the flow of words (which was not something you did and I'm fixing, heh). It i nvolved removing a period that the author had put in, which isn't grammatically necessary in english. ^^
 * 3) 9 - I think this is partially my fault, as I could've worded this better originally. I'm putting another version of it up, which is hopefully better than the original. That said, the "as I ate it" is still necessary, imo. ^^
 * 4) 10 - No need to change the "As a result" at the beginning imo, though I did leave the second change.
 * 5) 11 - The changes you made actually screwed up the sentence's structure altogether. Also, I'm pretty sure the tense was properly done for this sentence to begin with...as he's CURRENTLY talking about the fact that he FIGURES he can avoid hunting them from now on, since the growth rate from eating them WAS bad. Fixing this. The growth rate was bad DUE to the bats being weak...and AS SUCH...he figures that he can avoid them (it's what he's thinking at that time, not earlier in the day).
 * 6) 12 - Left the first change as it is, but reverted the second change. The second change you made just doesn't really work with the way the sentences are structured.
 * 1) 10 - No need to change the "As a result" at the beginning imo, though I did leave the second change.
 * 2) 11 - The changes you made actually screwed up the sentence's structure altogether. Also, I'm pretty sure the tense was properly done for this sentence to begin with...as he's CURRENTLY talking about the fact that he FIGURES he can avoid hunting them from now on, since the growth rate from eating them WAS bad. Fixing this. The growth rate was bad DUE to the bats being weak...and AS SUCH...he figures that he can avoid them (it's what he's thinking at that time, not earlier in the day).
 * 3) 12 - Left the first change as it is, but reverted the second change. The second change you made just doesn't really work with the way the sentences are structured.
 * 1) 11 - The changes you made actually screwed up the sentence's structure altogether. Also, I'm pretty sure the tense was properly done for this sentence to begin with...as he's CURRENTLY talking about the fact that he FIGURES he can avoid hunting them from now on, since the growth rate from eating them WAS bad. Fixing this. The growth rate was bad DUE to the bats being weak...and AS SUCH...he figures that he can avoid them (it's what he's thinking at that time, not earlier in the day).
 * 2) 12 - Left the first change as it is, but reverted the second change. The second change you made just doesn't really work with the way the sentences are structured.
 * 1) 12 - Left the first change as it is, but reverted the second change. The second change you made just doesn't really work with the way the sentences are structured.

After looking through it, I'm just not sure it's worth your time to do it, as it seemed that in some cases you actually made the grammar worse...or completely changed the meaning. Just not sure it's worth spending your time on it. ^^

For reference, here's the link to the changes I made based on your changes for the day. Hopefully it helps you understand what I was saying with each #. The only one that's on there that WASN'T part of your edited lines is the "Echolocation" ability mention just before the end.

Hopefully that answers your question(s), without me being too blunt about it...