Talk:Day 121-130/@comment-99.65.54.164-20151221061633

Day 124 sucked, from the third-person story-telling to the overly-describely every nuance, every paragraph left me asking, "Is it over yet?" Roughly the same feeling you get when you see Goku charging up a spirit bomb for 5 eps.

Example: first clash between Minokichi's axe and Aporou's spear should have closely resembled the description of the second time it happens:

Second time:

"The red spear was taken back out, the axe swung down, the red spear intercepted it, a clash, a flash of light and a shockwave flashed forth.

The aftermath of the scattered and indiscriminate destruction, the ground was torn to pieces, gravel being shot like arrows, the atmosphere screaming with tension. "

Equivalent selection of the first time:

"While achieving a courageous shout of war and spirit, Minokichi-kun drove himself forward, placing his momentum upon his shield that dawned the head of a golden cow. His axe raised above his shoulder, he rushed full tilt towards Aporou.

............. 52 paragraphs later ...........

Aporou’s face was in a great deal of pain from having his left eye crushed and so instinctively used [Hyper Speed Regeneration]. The skin which had festered and burnt away had been cured as if time itself were reversed.

The burnt skin and eyeball regenerated in the blink of an eye and any damage that had been dealt was negated. "

The difference in length speaks for itself.