Talk:Day 171-180/@comment-4784862-20150619180819/@comment-173.29.209.190-20150619211506

Woohoo! Thanks Caudyr!

(Many many many minutes later....) The Day makes more sense, now, but....yeesh! I'd forgotten how long it was! Grab a beer. Take the weekend off. Relax. :)

In the meantime....

Couple typos: "...to be deal...." deal -> dealt "...blood less...." less -> loss

Not sure about this: "...torture without letting him live or die." I think the author's trying to say the Hero kept the Lord on the border between life and death (which would be the standard English phrasing of the concept). If that's the case, the sentence should be reworded using that phrasing. Maybe like this: "...torture, keeping him on the border between life and death." (I think that's the simplest way to do it.) Otherwise, I'm not sure what the heck that line is supposed to mean.

Noun/pronoun consistancy + verb fix: "They looked just like someone that was in a situation...." -> "They looked just like people that were in a situation...."

Redundancy: "...the reason why...." nix the "why" (I can tell you the reason; I can tell you why....)

Rewording: "...head-on at a plain that's at exactly the midway point between...." -> "...head-on on the plains exactly midway between...." (switched to correct preposition; "plains" is always plural when referring to a natural field, and it always takes a definite article (yay English -_-); "the midway point" is, IMO, overly specific in this case, plus, changing "a plain" to "the plains" already implies (if not denotes) the point, thus the final bit of rewording.)